Journal #5

Pastiche using page 84:

Then Will started to consider Hope. Hope, that warm creature that looms over when necessary.  She stays in the clouds, but is capable of being with everyone. What enables hope to be with us? She straightens and stabilizes the ones wanting strength. Being provided, only when it's needed, this creature is prepared with an arm to put around us. Been prepared to account and help but hardly anyone accepts. He is likely to find it from a passing raindrop. He feels excited and enthusiastic. Oh Katie! She shouldn't have to find this wonderful formation of happiness alone. He wanted her to find it, but knew it wasn't possible.  Almost everyone wuz having a tough time finding hope. They'd be able to find it soon as a cloud brought in some gloom. Rather, that's what Katie thought. Others knew this would not be the case, though. So the next rainy day Will waited outside to find this glimpse of strength from the clouds. People that never believed this would help, went outside to discover it. Deciding to wait didn't work, the rain brought something else. Concern, the rain didn't bring anything, but seeded the people with doubt and concern.

By basing this on the passage off of page 84, I altered the ending tone from the beginning tone. I created a sense of happiness by using words, such as, warm, hope and clouds. As the story progressed, the tone shifts to a dull setting. The rain is supposed to provide hope, but brings concern and doubt because it doesn't help, and only hurts the people. Words used in the later part of the passage, like gloom, concern, and doubt help to develop the dull tone. I used anthropomorphism, like Hurston, to bring hope to life. Also, by capitalizing the "h" it gives it a God-like quality and a sense of protection and that it is above us. By making hope a character, it allows the reader to more easily relate it to life.